Say hello to Brock Peterportangelobo. Today is the big day, today Brock is going to ask for a raise. Brock works at the local landscaping business. Lately Brock has improved his work ethic and has worked extra hours, hoping to get promoted. He specializes in leave raking, like his father Mr.Timmy Peterportangelobo. Mr Peterportangelobo is a legend in Rock City. Every year the town holds an annual leave raking competition, Timmy won eight years in a row. That is the record by three years! Obviously Brock kept the family tradition alive and started raking at an early age. Anyways back to today, it was the big moment. Brock entered his bosses office and confidently said "Boss I would like a raise." Brock's boss quickly said "No! Get back to work or you're fired!." Shocked and dejected Brock walked away.
Once his shift was over Brock went home. Brocks mother, Betty looked at her sad son and asked what was wrong. Brock told her about work and started crying. Brock is very Emotional. His mother felt very bad and asked if he was going to be alright. Brock became very angry and yelled "NO!" at his mother. He was sent to his room for being bad.
In his room Brock started playing with his Lego's, one of his favorite past times. Soon after that Brock's friend, Winston, called and asked if Brock would like to go Pogo-Sticking with him. Pogo-Sticking is one of Brock's passions, but, nobody but Winston knows he does it because it is illegal. Brock kindlydeclined because he was having a bad day.
A few hours later, after he ate dinner Brock went outside for a walk. While walking Brock suddenly fell into a giant, gaping hole in the ground. Say goodbye to Brock Peterportangelobo.
Nice last name? Haha I like the pogo sticking. I like how you gav the story a real plot. very nice
ReplyDeleteGreat job Carson! Definitely used your imagination, way to be creative! Yeah the last name was not a common one but it made it interesting, good job! :)
ReplyDeleteI like how I had to re-read the beginning 3 times just so I could pronounce his name! But it was a very good story and yo definitely got creative with it! Nice Work!
ReplyDeleteThe last name is great! I like how it is a mix of yours, mine and Ashton's. I really liked the plot and how you fit his family and what he liked to do within the story. Great job.
ReplyDeleteI LOVE his last name! It was a very different story, but I liked it!
ReplyDeleteGreat story Carson! Super creative! I like that he plays with Lego's, and that pogo-sticking is illegal.
ReplyDeletevery clever with the story and the names!
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story and I think it will definitely be entertaining for little kids. I love how you ended the story...on a VERY happy note
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